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锐哥托福丨独立写作真题解析:交友建议,这道题该怎么写呢?

2023-05-19 06:13:09 145

摘要:纷纷开学,熬过了漫长的“寒假”,回到久违的校园,你还认识自己的同学吗?对于社恐的TA,可能得重新再经历一次和大家相识的过程。我估计ETS也是猜到了这点,所以,在7月的考试中给大家安排了一个“交友建议”的写作话题。今天,我们一起来看看,这道题...

纷纷开学,熬过了漫长的“寒假”,回到久违的校园,你还认识自己的同学吗?

对于社恐的TA,可能得重新再经历一次和大家相识的过程。

我估计ETS也是猜到了这点,所以,在7月的考试中给大家安排了一个“交友建议”的写作话题。

今天,我们一起来看看,这道题该怎么写呢?

2020.07.11 TOEFL Independent Writing

Which do you think is the best way for a student to make friends: 1. joining a sports team; 2. traveling; 3. participating in community activities? Use specific details and examples to support your answer.

1

• 审题

先明确题干中涉及的动作和对象,我们可以圈出这两个关键词:for a studentmake friends

然后,从最近同学们提交的习作来看,有部分同学对选项中的 community activity 产生了误解,我们需要正确理解它的内涵

community activity → Community activity is part of ‘civic responsibility’ .

It’s about doing things in our community because we want to give back to our communities, or help others, rather than because we have to by law.

所以,它指的是一种出于公民责任感而做出的回馈社会的举动,是一种慈善助人行为,并非是社区里纯粹的日常休闲活动

2

• 立论及破题

今天给大家推荐的立场是 joining a sports team

破题的思路也不复杂:

• 运动给学生交友提供了可能,团队里面有非常多志同道合的人

• 运动可以帮助我们维系友情,使其更为坚固

• 正文 - 开头段

Making friends has always been challenging for some students, especially newcomers in high school or college. To tackle this problem, people proposed a laundry list of suggestions like joining a sports team, participating in community services, or traveling. Of course, there will be constant arguments over which one is the most effective. From my perspective, friendship can be fostered through a shared love of sports.

• a laundry list of - If you describe somegthing as a laundry list of things, you mean that it is a long list of them.

• 正文 - 论述段#1

Sports provide an excellent icebreaker. [topic sentence] The most practical reason for this lies in the fact that it brings out a variety of people with whom you share a common interest. The most crucial part of friendship, I believe, is undoubtedly establishing a bond. Instead of making small talks in order to figure out what you and others are in common, the sports you are involved in help you do that. Later on, you will have more to talk about after the games or practices. [reasoning] Oliver, a close friend of mine, would like to exemplify my point with his own experience. As a freshman in college, he struggled for months trying to blend in with the new environment. No matter how hard he tried, he found an invisible barrier between himself and others. It was the idea of joining a sports club that turned the tables. He noticed an advertisement on the bulletin board saying that the university soccer club was recruiting new members. A crazy soccer fan like him would never let go of the chance. After being admitted to the club, he spent at least two hours on the pitch practicing and shared those experiences with his teammates. They sweated together, competed for positions, and sometimes complained about the coach together for what he had put them through. As time went by, the barrier disappeared. Oliver tells me that to this day, his tightest circle of friends includes mostly his former soccer teammates from college years.[exemplification]

• 正文 - 论述段#2

An icebreaker is not the only thing that playing sports can bring. Besides, it teaches you how to maintain a good relationship with a friend. The two keywords are respect and cooperation. [topic sentence] Respect helps you win a friend, and teamwork is the glue that holds friends together. [reasoning] Going back to Oliver’s experience, while playing in the university soccer league, he met Kevin, who later became his best friend. As players of two greatest rivals in the league, the friendship seemed unimaginable in an outsider’s eyes. Everything started with Oliver’s first match against Kevin’s. A powerful striker always receives “special attention” from the rival supporters. Kevin is no exception. The rival fans chanted insults to Kevin every time he touched the ball, which made him annoyed. It was Oliver who stopped the fans. When being asked about the reason, he explained that Kevin was a great player and deserved respect. His kindness and respect quickly established a bond between him and Kevin. Later, both of them made it to the university soccer team. Playing together in the same team set them a common goal to win the national title. Soccer is a game of eleven players. To win the champion, Kevin, as a striker, needed to score more goals, and Oliver, as a defender, had to stop the opposite side from scoring any goals. Three years’ efforts and three championship titles finally made their friendship indestructible.[exemplification]

• 正文 - 结尾段

To put it in a nutshell, there may be various ways for students to make friends. However, playing sports is the best among them and should be recommended to those who have a social problem.

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